Talk:Lillian/@comment-36043245-20180701060843

i'm gonna be honest, this story is bad. too many parts where i'm questioning why you put that in the story. such as why are you going to bed with your mom's pocket knife when you could tell your mother/parents what's going on? where are the parents in this story? he doesn't know where you live either? just your general vicinity? (there's like 900,000 people living in austin, tx, how would he find you in that? maybe ip logging but still???) also why does the main character know that something is up and wrong but continue down the wrong path anyway? such as whenever they are about to say that they live in austin, tx, but stop themselves and think about it and how bad it is, but then proceed with it anyway? or whenever they know somethings up so they unfriend this person, but then decide to friend them again anyway? this story just lacks common sense. i understand children have different mindsets or are curious etc. so they're more inclined to get themselves into trouble but still. also for half of the story i was under the impression you were a male up until the murderer or lillian or whoever called you mabel, and it almost seemed as if you were interested in dating the person.

again this is just an opinion so please no annoying 9 year olds replying saying "UR JUST JEALOUS REPORTED". i don't even write stories, i have no interest in it lol. i have nothing to be jealous of. instead maybe have an actual argument, and tell me why you think the story is good? :)