Talk:Roblox ruined my life/@comment-39442597-20200531153022

7.4/10

For the positives in this story, it has an original good plot by showing the character’s person in game, and all players leaving before the event occurs, along with the feeling of terror and reluctance running through it

However on the negative side the story does have some cliches in it, such as a dark figure appearing behind them and their whole family dying because of a visit to a game. The story also ends on a cliffhanger which does open up a future entrance to a sequel, however it doesn’t deliver a final sentence to emphasize it.

Overall the story is fine, it’s just I don’t think events online should go that far into the real world, and end up in the protagonists life being ruined. However the story has good originality in the beginning, and is able to give the reader a feeling of “What’s Next?” throughout, as many pastas do. My suggestion would be to practice some more and write another, since the way the story ends gives us an intention on a sequel that won’t have much to do with roblox.