Talk:REASONWHO'S Return/@comment-27730508-20190301051305

This review was conducted on February 28th, 2019.

Grammar/Spelling: I fixed (most) of the grammar and spelling errors. Some errors couldn't be fixed because it would change the diction or meaning too much. Other errors couldn't be fixed due to the sentence, or part of the creepypasta - not making sense either way.

General Story: Well, as a sequel to the original, it's kind of lacking, story-wise. There's little to comment on or worth nothing, but I will say that you should have probably come up with a better ending. The current ending is disappointing and unsatisifiyng. It just does not give any conclusive "answer" to the story and feels like you rushed to get the pasta finished near the end. I get that you're going to finished this pasta soon, but you should read back your ending for anything you could improve, story wise. I'm not allowed to as I am not the author, I only fix things like the grammar, spelling, and formatting of a pasta. Never the story.

FINAL SCORE: 3/10