User blog comment:Your Ordinary Normal Guy/Don't play Hide and Seek in a horror game./@comment-46067447-20200913002819

I think this creepypasta has potential, but it could use some work. I would say that building suspense and luring people in really helps. Also, try to split the story into sections and paragraphs. It can't all be "The Start", since that section has the beginning, the middle, AND the end. I'm sure you will make great stories in the future. :)