Talk:The Rare Update Incident/@comment-39442597-20200617175723

10/10

The story is well done and places an emphasis on itself, as it manages to add a sequence through the odd description and thumbnail, along with his computer going back to 2006 which was the year roblox was publicly released. Even though it is short the story’s abrupt ending and plot give the reader a sense of “What will happen next?”, this feeling is also emphasized as the author speculated this at first as a joke, hence “To the victims”. The last sentence “It feels like I’m set back in time” contributes to the meaning as well, symbolizing a sense of loneliness and dread as the protagonist was alone whilst playing. I also enjoyed the introduction on the game and the story, as it mixed a feeling of curiosity and draws the reader in further. It also manages to keep itself afloat by adding to the sequence, as the wall moves, and the sign of the pizzeria is instead a black texture. It also manages to question the author’s state, since the claim is made he is tired and is not sure if these events were real. To me the story seems like a perfect example at writing a creepypasta. I also can’t find any major negatives on the story besides some grammar errors and the computer acting up, so whoever wrote this, Good work.