Talk:Kampfin/@comment-39442597-20200601223601

9.4/10

For the positives, the story is very intimidating, provides the reader with enough storyline and momentum to allow them to go further, as the sequence of events involving the chat box turning red, and the disturbing sights in his game are able to entice a feeling of “What’s Next?”. The feeling of fear is also emphasized fully at the ending, with the author checking something after an odd message, only for the story to end abruptly with a police report showing the author dead.

For the negatives there are slight cliches with the author dying, as the message says “I’m coming for you” and yet the myth manages to find out his location, which is common in most stories.

However yet the story’s motive is clear, especially at the last photo showing Kampfin with “FEAR ME” above him. The advice I can give to the author is that he should focus more on thought-of events, and make them not blend far into the real world. Overall I liked it, through Morse code, the character on a like, and the messages turning red.