Talk:Yugder/@comment-37641686-20181209230149

I'm sorry I honestly can't read this.Your grammar severely requires improvement and try to avoid capitalizing everything when it comes to dialogue(e.g. "DON'T YOU DARE RUN FROM ME I AM THE DEVIL HIMSELF" it also needs a comma before "DON'T)and please capitalize the first word of sentences too.Please make further attempt to make your plot elaborate and avoid making it riddled with cliches.Try taking a look at a writing class, as I know it might assist some people.Try proofreading your pasta as well,  you'll feel more satisfied with what comes out. Apart from the plethora of grammar mistakes and cliches, I feel this pasta could do well with an altered plot that is more sensible. Although, I will have to rate this a 1.5/10 for the moment.