Talk:BLOOD/@comment-39383213-20191019104903

Since everybody is doing blood puns, I can't think of any original puns. Bloody hell. Also, read all of this because I'm not just some troll making fun of you.


 * clap clap* CLICHE COUNT:

blood is scary!!! 1

wait, you have a hatch for putting backpacks in!? Also, shadow creatures. 2

666 is scary!!! 3

blood. blood everywhere. 4

Big bad entity somehow makes phone go REEE. 5

Big bad entity affects the roblox character. 6

Big bad entity has bad backstory to make us feel some sort of sympathy. Although the main character reacts well to this, so I won't give it a spot on the count.

Well now, bloody hell. Only 6 cliches in a story even longer then most cliche stories I review. This was incredibly made, and I hope Tay-Toh's grammar fixes make this story better. I really hope that you improve story writing, as you have a LOT of potential. I deeply feel sorry for you, having a mental disability myself. I hope that you get to do great things. If it wasn't for the cliches, this would be a 10/10. Toodles!