Talk:Venomshank/@comment-28816784-20160622112518

I found tons of grammar errors on this, (I fixed them, but still) The way it's written confused me as I read it, so you may need to practice writing more. Also, one of the rules of posting a pasta is you cannot add notes that are out of the story. I.e.: "Hey guys, sorry I haven't posted in a while. Anyway here's the story:"

I am still trying to figure out what happened in the pasta to this very moment. Sorry to rain on your parade and be a total jerkwad, but these things need to be heard by the public.

I would give the story a 4/10. Sorry, but you need to proofread, maybe a have a buddy check it before you post it. Other people are useful as they help you see errors or plot holes that you didn't see before.