Talk:Asylum/@comment-28527909-20161205221138

There was certain cliches that took away excitement from the story, however, the plot didn't fail to capture the reader's attention. I asked myself a lot of questions though as I read. "Did the lights blackout ingame or in real life?" "Why couldn't your character run, and why couldn't you exit the game?" These are a few questions I asked. You should work on incorperating answers into your story smoothly as you go along, so the story isn't a bunch of questions with no answers, unless you intended for questions to be asked. Overall, excellent writing skills. Be it grammar and proper english, you didn't cease to excel in those. Keep up the nice work.

8.4/10