Talk:I Went to One of Those Free Robux Websites/@comment-37641686-20190206005616

I'll begin with spelling errors,

"It was a rather bland Saturday despite I completed all of my homework"

Despite [insert: the fact] I completed all my homework

"but it reminded me of an abandon house or something"

- It's abandoned

"And with that, I accepted the bots agonizing request and a few mineuts later, an automatic message popped up in the private chat: Hello! Would you like to receive and amazing amount of robux??? Simply go to [RANDACTED SITE] to achieve your reward!"

- You spelled minutes wrong

- You spelled Redacted wrong

- And is supposed to be an

"But when I dashed inside, clutching a curling handle plugged into a nearby outlet, nobody, nothing, was insight."

- It's in sight

Although your incredible vocabulary boosted your score up, it is now a 5.5/10 for this section

Next, whether your statements about roblox were accurate

-Forums died in 2017, and you don't exactly give a specific time when the game takes place although considering you chose Broken Bones IV it had to at least be in 2018.

That's about all 8.5/10

General Plot:

It was alright and the idea of using a scambot for the creepypasta was creative although I felt that near the end you unintentionally caused a transition from an exceptional plot with the scambot to a rather cliche filled one, considering the narrator's assumptions about the horrific events occuring with its computer being proven wrong and the narrator's visceral reaction to thus. I do enjoy how you conveyed the narrator's sudden confusion caused as a result of what was occurring, and timing how the narrator's psychosis and mind set shattered while the incident with his computer was rapidly getting worse.

8/10

Overall Score:

22/30