Talk:New Friends/@comment-39442597-20200530141051

9.5/10

Overall had a good structure and punctuation, developed the classic “teleportation” plot whilst still keeping itself afloat by listing a series of well thought of events, such as the character falling into the mouth, and his friends somehow being on the player’s list. I also liked the last sentence saying “the world around me is dark” giving the reader a deeper impression of loneliness and dread, which contributes to the story as a whole, and the sign even gives the impression that the main character may be the antagonist, not the monster. (If you put it deep into thought)