Talk:Guest666RealOfficial/@comment-39442597-20200805023236

4.9/10

For the positive side of the story, it maintains itself pretty well at the beginning and furthermore drags the reader in through odd occurrences. This is added to by the excellent use of grammar and punctuation.

Unfortunately the story does hold more negatives to tilt the scale at a standstill. What I mean by this is that it holds a pretty large amount of traditional cliches within it, such as “Guest666RealOfficial”, the use of curiosity, and finally just the originality of the script. Though I can assume that the author must have been tired or unable to think of anything otherwise.

Overall it is pretty decent in length and scale, however it’s foundations are mainly constructed by cliches you’d typically find in an old horror story. To me the writing itself is pretty bland, though I don’t wish to insult the author here. My best guess on advice is to not use an insurmountable amount of cliches within the story, otherwise it won’t appeal directly to other writers. For anything else you can improve on, just don’t think of any unfortunate event with clear originality, and try to pull in the reader with some more descriptive writing. You did very well on grammar and made it comprehensively clear, whilst still also pertaining to a motive, it’s just the usage of too many original concepts bogged down the main intentions. For now you made need to practice on a few drafts, and maybe you’ll be able to improve.