User blog:AppleLeg/Unreleased ROBLOX Prototype Review (Pasta Reviews)

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what do we have here


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and the winner is:::;

Unreleased Roblox prototype thing

Okay

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Review--

The creepypasta has tons of cliches but it is an interesting story and it had lots of potential to be good. The idea is original and really there's not much to say. Really the idea can get the viewers attention and uh, yeah. Pretty much the only good thing about this is the plot. The story telling is okay. It needs work.

The story has cliches, some of them are the worst cliches I've ever seen. Like a cliche in a troll pasta.

I'm not even joking some of them are that bad. The cliche went like this: "Test Server had no players each day and David Baszucki said: This server is not for the public, Please don't enter. On December 27, 1990, One player decided to enter it and around 4:25 AM, he got banned from the Build-A-Block prototype and was murdered."

Yeah he got banned and he was murder and he was raped and he went to jail and his mom was murderd and he became a slave and and and uh

Seriously I thought it was a JOKE. But anyway, I give it a.....


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5.9/10

Sorry if I dissapointed you but yeah.

So the story has a good plot, but it needs to be rewritten. But it stands out from other creepypasta's and I would love to see a part II. I actually made a pasta inspiried from that one.

Yeah it's a classic, really reccomend you to check it out.

BYE

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