Talk:ROBLOX - Why Don't You Get It?/@comment-28527909-20160625204825

Amazing grammar, great story. I didn't see any cliches, but the idea could have been more developed. I loved the suspense you left the reader in by including things like "Why didn't she get it?". It really made me wonder what was happening outside, and what "It" was. Good job!

9.5/10