Talk:1Mm0R74l1L17y/@comment-39442597-20200613142444

3.6/10

For the little amount of positives, the story is able to provide itself with some momentum at the beginning, and manages to draw the reader in more, just not in an enjoyable fashion like other stories.

For the large amount of negatives, the story is incredibly cliche, and does not emphasize nor base itself on structure, hence “glowing red eyes” and references to him being best friends with... yeah. There’s also no feeling of common sense among the protagonists as they decide to go deeper instead of reporting or blocking him, along with them thinking it would be a good idea to visit him AGAIN after all of the tremendous events. The grammar is also off at some points, such as random capitalization on words such as “at”, and them using Its, and not It’s. I could go on and on, but to cut it short in a summary, it’s constructed heavily on cliche and doesn’t add much credibility to itself, as the last sentence “Watch your steps darling” doesn’t relate to the story’s motive. The word “So” is also frequently used, and the sentences are spaced out way too many times.

Overall it wasn’t my intention to call the author a bad writer because I’m sure they could have improved now and then, but this story has a very flimsy and predictable plot, and doesn’t draw the reader in with a positive fashion. Really to me it just seems like a poor attempt at self-promoting a myth.