Talk:Roblox - God Mode/@comment-34391199-20180225032824

Really good for a first creepypasta! Here's some advice though:

1. You should probably make it a bit more longer/detailed

2. The scary stuff happened all too fast!

3. An admin command effecting real life and saying "No escape from god mode" is kinda unrealistic and makes the creepypasta not as scary. And also, red screens and unusual bent gory poses are overused, next time take your time to make yourcreepypasta stand out more!

Please not that those 3 things listed were not to be offensive, they were pieces of advice that I think could improve your stories!