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The beginning and climax were very well written, with minor Grammatical errors. But the last part, I don't understand, at the point where Ashley was introduced, the sentence structure and plot went downhill; The protagonist suddenly pulls out a random character that somehow knows how to help with the 'Richard Roe' situation and when the protagonist knows what really went on. The protagonist also suddenly asked the character, Ashley, to move to a different country without a build-up to the event.

There should have been a build-up to the rest of the events because of the suddenness of the plot. Also, what did all of this have to do anything with TheC0mmunity? Other than these Infractions, the story was pretty good. You can go back and fix the grammar errors.

I give this pasta a tasty 7/10. Compliments to the chef.