Talk:1/03/08/@comment-39442597-20201009160051

8.5/10

For the positives, the story is able to provide a very well made structure, excellent punctuation, and ability to entice the reader's further interest. I also liked the way it went into different accounts of players and how they usually acted, which is key to plot development. It also provides a sequence of events which leads us to really question the validity of this report itself, not to mention it ends on an abrupt note by saying JJJ hasn't been active since the event, symbolizing he has either lost interest, or been faced with something worse.

For the negatives, and yes, there are indeed small amounts cliches, mainly consisting of how the event took place a long time ago, coupled with the minor incidents that took place prior to the termination of the players, nevertheless it eventually gives off a good impression.

Overall the story is well done, and provides a productive sequence and is able to keep the reader in by going into specifics and showing images/screenshots of the events unfolding, further adding to the mystery of it. In my personal opinion the way this takes place before ROBLOX really took off as a game draws me in further. Best wishes and regards to the author, and also a Happy Halloween!