Talk:The pool water/@comment-27730508-20171118165901

Alright, right off the bat there's something wrong with this story. You didn't even add commas or make your sentence flow one bit! The story is just one big run-on-sentence, and nobody likes a run-on-sentences here. Secondly, your grammar is really bad in this ("...which I think was click bait and I didn't find it so I bought one of...") also, you made a slight cliche ("...my ipad was making noises like ha ha ha...") Otherwise, nothing else to really say here.

2/10