Thread:KaramellSyX/@comment-34363805-20180423140308/@comment-34411273-20180423154937

I wasn't trying to say that mine was better in any way! I just said that it looked a lot like my story. Just a small tip: Try not to directly take information. I'm 100% okay if you make a story about a pedophile on Roblox. Actually, I think it's almost necessary to share how Roblox isn't 100% safe! I'd just prefer if you tried to create something original out of that idea and not use one example (Lillian). It would properly display how this isn't always the same, exact scenario for every case of online dangers. Feel free to take this little bit of critic or not. I want to see you improve your writing! Feel free to talk to me if you need ideas or have any questions!