User blog comment:NaomiGunnerReads/The Sisters (RC)/@comment-27730508-20190228033531

(Not sure how this Writer's Workshop thing works, so I'll post my review here.)

Note: This is not a final review. Since this is a Writer's Workshop review, do not use this as a way to decide to read this pasta. Thanks.

Grammar/Spelling: Minor errors such as lowercase "I"'s not being capitalized, sentences not using the past tense (e.g, "except that Rose and Layla aren't here." should be "except that Rose and Layla weren't there.".), and other minor errors.

General Story: I really like the designs of the players and monster (not related to the pasta, just thought I'd say that), it adds a bit more depth to this pasta. As for the actual story, it is a pretty decent story. It has a good beginning, and end. However, the middle of the pasta seems to be quite bleak in terms of detail (It's Still There), but overall this is a good read. Did I mention I like the designs of the characters?

(Not) Final score: 7.8/10.