Talk:PR0J3C74B4ND0N3D/@comment-27730508-20181129043345

This review was conducted on November 28th, 2018. This is a re-review.

Grammar/Spelling: Mostly fixed from the original, but could still use improving. I'm not going to list every mistake because someone's done that for me. I normally do highlight every mistake, just not in this instance. Also, don't be a keyboard warrior and attack me for writing a "harry potter novel" on his/her mistakes. It makes you look like an asshole.

General Story: Chock full of cliches. It's almost every cliche you can imagine for a pasta like this. Bloody imagery, leet speak, your computer not turning off and shutting down basically of an entity, and "I WILL HAUNT YOU AGAIN". Games becoming blood red or tinted red, and similar cliches. I honestly think you should listen to the comments, because people are critiquing your story, and there's a good reason why most of the people here don't like this story. The story, even without the cliches, is just another shitty creepypasta on the site. I'm not joking. It seems rushed and barely any effort was put into immersing the reader and really driving the point of the story in question. I hope this review, along with any other reviews I give on your creepypastas, will help you become a better writer.

Effort: Little to none.

FINAL SCORE: 2/10