Talk:The creepy story of bubbabear609/@comment-34411273-20180203025349

Sort of interesting...I feel like you could actually make it longer! If you added more detail, it could actually have some potential! Well, it does, but I mean...more potential. If you meant it to be short and sweet, it's pretty good! The grammar needs some improving, but other than that, it's good!

Nice first Creepypasta! Keep writing, keep improving. Only thing is that in future creepypastas, try and do more character development. I felt almost nothing when Caleb admitted to being Youwillmeetyourend and stabbed Jacob to death. I know, that sounds cruel, but if you developed both Jacob AND Caleb more, it would really help feel that true "impact."

I'd say a 6/10. Decent, but needs a little improvement. Have a nice day! :)