Talk:Who is Extreme67?/@comment-30614152-20180311085528

Constructive Criticism

1. Please... The name of the place is extremely cringy, and cliche. "Extremely depressed game". Try to be more creative than that.

2. Try to read your story many times, or proof read, because the grammar in this story is horrible, and.. yeah, that's all i can say.

3. Also, try to be more creative than that! I don't want to see "Meets a person > Randomly friends with him > Tells family member > Not playing it anymore" It's like Extreme is just some normal user who wants to have a friend. But in the bright side, it's original.

4. I know i already fixed it..... BUT Don't do wall of text next time! Make paragraphs! We are making a story, not doing an assignment from school!